If you’re thinking this is a post about hiatus, rewrite or dropping the story, IT IS NOT, so don’t panic.
Edit: Thanks to Fyx from royalroad for making me realize what I have been lacking or should I say, stopped using!
Fufufu, this will make the next chapters much more interesting, I’ll definitely edit the other chapters to fit without changing the plot when I’m free.
TL/DR: I need help to improve my writing. Any suggestions, pointers at what’s exactly bad and needs to be improved are helpful and very much appreciated.
This is not a rant, more like a plea for assistance/guidance, so if you do decide to read, read it until the end.
Recently I received quite a few constructive reviews. Some authors rant about how someone throws mud at them or their story, but that’s not me. Saying “this is not an author-friendly site” and other things is completely beyond me as well.
For me, getting bashed by other viewers that something could be done better means that they care about the story.
These readers actually care so much that they even leave a review stating what’s wrong.
Does this feel bad to get reviews like this?
Of course it does, it means you, as an author, have fucked something up.
Although reviews like “Great work, keep it up.”, “More chapters please.” help you as an author to keep writing, pushing yourself to the limits and so on, only ones like ElDani’s make you realize some things.
First things first, I’ll adress the top review, Wolfsnow’s one.
To start off, the story revolving around “Mary Sue” was made so on purpose.
I don’t like weak characters, true, but that doesn’t mean I created the God of Universe, or something like that.
As you’ve clearly stated, there are no other characters shown up to late, especially the top ranking ones, thus you can’t really say if he’s op or not.
The only thing that you’re able to state, is that his class is overpowered, which is known far and wide.
Moving on, there’s the MMO issue, yes, it is very true, I haven’t shown the other characters as of yet.
They’ll appear soon, the reason they are hidden is because some of the game mechanics need to stay obscured for now.
Otherwise they would make their appearances earlier.
Same goes for the “random” rage/op skill usage. There are just game mechanics, you, as readers, are not aware of.
Don’t worry, these mechanics will be shown, just not yet.
One-dimensional characters, that’s true. I have realized how much this morning.
I knew they were peculiar, but yeah, you’re right.
Still, even if I were to write these chapters 27-ish, if I recall correctly right now, I would do it the same way.
Mika’s party is salvagable, they fit nicely.
Don’t get me wrong, they’re definitely weirdos, but I’ll make it work.
As for the other characters, mainly FireryRed and her party plus Sylph and her party, they didn’t see anything that disturbing to be feeling repulsive or something.
Everyone has his quirks, maybe I’m just displaying it too much. I’ll try to decrease the amount of random personalities.
Last part of that review, that is the story and its overall progress, power-spikes and so on.
It is how I wanted it to be. Sure, it could have been much better in the early stages if I wrote with the narration.
However, as I have decided to stick to the story without narration, all I can say is that the overall story sohuld have much more surprises in the “middle and late game” stages.
There’s the stats question.
I was planning to address it soon, that is after the tournament, so wait patiently.
Okay, to the main point now.
ElDani’s review that “opened my eyes”.
During the entire writing phase, I’ve come to realize that my writing style is pretty bad, horrendous even.
I was just not sure how to fix that.
Then when the reviews came in, saying that grammar is pretty good and all, I became oblivious, maybe even delusional, completely forgetting to step it up.
I don’t blame the readers, that’s not what I’m trying to stress.
They have probably just thought that there’s nothing more to expect, so the viewers decided to remain silent.
At least I think it went that way.
I’m not going to say “I’m not a native speaker” bla bla bla, that has nothing to do with this.
If I was more dilligent during learning phase, I could probably express myself better.
Both readers and I would be able to enjoy ourselves more.
What I’m trying to say, is that I have learnt a lot, it’s just I need to peruse the grammar.
There are a lot of expressions I have refrained from using, just because I wasn’t sure how to properly do so.
This story is definitely going to be at least 300 chapters long.
If I include the POVs, sidestories, descriptions, additional characters and whatever else comes to mind to fill in the few gaps, then there’s probably going to be around 600 chapters.
Then there’s the ending issue. I’ve thought of a few, some may prolong the story by another 600 chapters, others will leave it open for “second season” or whatever comes to mind, and some others will end the story definitely.
In any case, it’s going to be a long ride, so I don’t want my viewers to just stay for the plot while struggling with the terrible writing style.
I would feel bad doing so. The story that I wanted to write, is one that I would enjoy readinn myself.
Although I do not have many grammatical requirements, I am sure that reading one that is polished, well-worded and just makes you feel like reading a book is superior to the style I am using right now.
To sum it all up.
I’ll definitely look for some pointers myself, but if you do have anything specific that may help me, feel free to share in the comments.
Whether it is a simple comment stating what feels wrong or an essay stressing out all the errors, DO NOT HESITATE.
I want to know how to improve, and the obvious thing to do, at least I think it is obvious, is to ask.
So, with all that said, whether you’re an author, English major or just someone who knows of something that might help me, express it in the comments, I’ll take all the hate and love with pride, it just means you care so much about the story.
I may not aspire to become the professional writer, but hell, I can at least try to write like one.
I know it won’t be easy, nor will it happen in just a few days, but if I better my skills day by day, somewhere in the future, we’ll be able to enjoy yhr story with appropriate writing style.
Thanks to Wolfsnow, ElDani and euodiachloris for constructive reviews, on royalroad and here on the blog.
That’s all I wanted to say.
The updates will continue, I’ll try to keep it 4-5 chapters a week, while continuosly struggling to improve the writing style.
Actually, one more thing, I realize that earlier chapters require some attention, I’ll focus on getting them at least not to be completely terrible in the upcoming week.